It was a very hot summer day. We were swimming at the water-hole. I was about to jump off the top rock. I took a deep breath and… jump. It felt like I was flying. I hit the water it was black and I couldn’t see. Then I saw something white swimming towards me. I swam away as fast as I could. I got to the rocks and yelled up to Jaykib “I think there’s a polar bear in the water”. There isn’t a polar bear in there it’s just an expensive looking towel” Jaykib said. “Oh” I said. Then I leaped off the rocks
That is a very creative piece of writing. I like the way you were able to use the 5 words as they made sense in the story, you didn't just through them in randomly. It is a very fun piece. Thank you
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